Twinkling Stars (Triolet)

As the stars sparkle in the night sky, …

Hey guys! The ‘Triolet’ is another form of French poetry (see Imprimatur (Rondelet)) consisting of a single octave (stanza of 8 lines) with 2 rhymes and 2 refrains. The pattern the poem follows is ABaAabAB, where the capital letters represent the refrains. Hope you enjoy!

As the stars sparkle in the night sky,
Each twinkling to its own melodic tune,
One pair seem to have gone awry;
As the stars sparkle in the night sky,
They blink in accordance, strong allies,
Brighter together than the rest of the strewn
Solo stars sparkling in the night sky,
Each flickering to its own melodic tune.

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Author: Anacrazyfuturewriter

Hey everyone! I'm a tenth-grade poetry enthusiast, Harry Potter aficionado, and public speaking connoisseur. My poems aim to convey the profound philosophical thoughts that come to me when I'm playing a game of chess or watching an episode of the Big Bang Theory. I love experimenting with new forms and styles of poetry, so you just might find yourself improving your own repertoire of poetic formats as you browse through this blog. Thanks for reading!

22 thoughts on “Twinkling Stars (Triolet)”

  1. Try to get the metre right, it should have a rhythm, usually iambic tetrametre and the last two lines should be the same as the first. You could try a villanelle. That lets you alter the last lines.

  2. Hi thanks for commenting on my triolet. It’s a great form – I’ll do some more. Great if you did too. You asked for advice. I’m self taught and not an expert but the rhyme in line five ‘allies’ doesn’t quite work. Would go with skies but then mess up others bits. Then line six is too long Eleven beats when the others are nine. Spoils the rhythm. You could change it to read, ‘Bright together, across the sky strewn.’

  3. A lovely triolet! Perhaps the two stars could “blink in sync”…and I’d leave out “the” in front of strewn; just my thoughts (since you asked). Happy writing 🙂

  4. I don’t have any advice but it really liked the poem. Keep up the great work. Even though the format wasn’t perfect as others have noted, I think it’s nice. I really like the topic.

  5. It’s a lovely attempt! I’m sure I shall enjoy your poetry. Just one word of advise for this poem, in the last line stick to “twinkling” instaed of ‘flickering’. Flickering adds an extra syllable that you do not need! Hope to see you around! 🙂

  6. Awesome! The repeated lines aren’t exact, but I like it better this way, not hemmed in by the strictness of the rules but “flickering to its own melodic tune.” I like when poets aren’t afraid to try something different, deviate a little. 🙂

  7. This is a twinkling gem of a Triolet. Thanks for sharing! I am a Creative Life Coach with a poetry blog and today’s post features Rondelets in case you have time to look?

    I am also on Instagram as #coachingcreatively, let’s follow each other if you use this medium? You can also find me on Facebook under Sam Allen wearing a bright red and orange hat!

    I love connecting with fellow creatives as you can see!

    Sunny greetings from Switzerland!

    Sam 🙂

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